Kia ora Liberty. You have made some great choices with your words. It is very descriptive and I can picture the volcanic eruption in my mind as I read your writing. Make sure that you go back and reread your writing and check for any small errors. Please read my comments on your slides (in your google drive) as this will help you to make some changes to make your writing even better. Well done Liberty.
Kia ora Liberty, thank you for sharing your mahi (work) with us. I can see you have thought carefully about which words to use in your writing. I particularly like: "Lightning skated around the sky." I can just imagine this happening! You can be proud of this work - ka pai Liberty!
Kia ora Liberty. You have made some great choices with your words. It is very descriptive and I can picture the volcanic eruption in my mind as I read your writing. Make sure that you go back and reread your writing and check for any small errors. Please read my comments on your slides (in your google drive) as this will help you to make some changes to make your writing even better. Well done Liberty.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Liberty, thank you for sharing your mahi (work) with us. I can see you have thought carefully about which words to use in your writing. I particularly like: "Lightning skated around the sky." I can just imagine this happening! You can be proud of this work - ka pai Liberty!
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